[greenhillzoner]

Hey i'm back from my vacation in Japan and i got to say konichiwa! Anyway while there i saw a hentai comic (Japanese only although there might be a translated scan somewhere on the internet)similar to "Furry Bomb" which is also available for scan if you look it up on palooza.com or yahoo.com but the comic is called "Sonic XXX". So without further ado my rendition of "Sonic XXX"!!

A long time ago through the years, Sonic the hedgehog has ignored poor Amy Rose. After many tries, lonely nights with a dildo, and empty tear ducts
Amy found another. Days later Sonic received a letter from Amy, in it she wrote about her new boyfriend and the wonderful night they had. Sonic filled with grief and love for the pink hedgehog. Sonic soon set out to find Amy and Apologize.

I hope you all enjoyed this first part of "Sonic XXX" and yes i know there was not anything that sounded anywhere near pornograpihc but hey you waited for various other fanfic parts you can wait for this one right?

[Kvitne]

What is it with you and this obsession over pornography?

[angelfire]

I know, seriously. And plus... that was a story?

[Kvitne]

He said that it was the first part. Although usually first parts are longer.

[angelfire]

I know it was his first part, but there wasn;t much to it, really. Everything just happened so..... fast.

[Kvitne]

Just leave it. He doesn't know what story writing is.

[KJ]

Awesome first part, greenhillzoner! That was incredible, your descriptions of how Sonic felt was remarkable! You should be one of those one-page children's book writers, I'd guarantee you'd be the best at it!

...Now seriously, no, that was terrible.

[Kvitne]

Okay, that's enough bashing. I don't know anything about good writing, but you two are RPers, so you have at least a little bit of experience with story telling. How about you guys try to give him some advice instead of just saying that it's terrible and not providing any reasons?

[???????]

Heh, you make it seem like people who role play and write fan fictions have some kind of special rank when you say RPers.

greenhillzoner, if you make your story long enough, then maybe Mater of AFTER will feature it on Project AFTER. I say you give it a shot!

[Pyroman]

yeah...

This is... kinda weird. I didn't realize their was any yiff going on here... riiiiight... you probably made a lot of furries very happy right now... or at least all the kinky ones.

Does this happen often here?

[Kvitne]

No. In fact, besides Muzzy's Amy story, this hasn't really happened all that much. It's mostly this guy.

[Pyroman]

oh, ok. I just wanted to make sure.

It looks like we know who the porn master around here is! ph34r t3h extensive porn collection! PH34R IT!

[angelfire]

Steve Jobs, on Feb 18 2007, 04:15 PM, said:

Okay, that's enough bashing. I don't know anything about good writing, but you two are RPers, so you have at least a little bit of experience with story telling. How about you guys try to give him some advice instead of just saying that it's terrible and not providing any reasons?

Well, I did give a reason, although I might not have made it all too clear. The paragraph he wrote went by WAY too fast; it all happened in one big blur without any real describing. That's all I have to say.

[Master of AFTER]

Congratulations, greenhillzoner, your fanfic has inspired me to institute a new rule!

[Kvitne]

Wow, and I betcha he feels all warm and fuzzy inside too!

[Darkstalker]

All I can say is, WOW

[Sway]

1. Old topic.
2. Member hasn't visited since he posted this topic.
3. Not "WOW"!!!