[spyke the hedgehog]

my story takes place on an island called Ivory Island.

main characters:

spyke the hedgehog

Dante the bat

bolt the wolf

scar the scorpion

commander scorpio the scorpion
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well, here goes... hope you like it!
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scar stood beside his fellow officer. he turned toward him.

scar: do we even know who we're attacking yet?

officer: I don't think so. commander scorpio hasn't announced it yet.

scar eyed the officer suspiciously.

scar: Is there something you're not telling me, officer?

officer: N-no, of course not!

just then, commander scorpio came through the doors of the palace that the two officers were supposed to be gaurding. he had a grim look on his face.

scorpio: I heard my name. what were you two talking about?

officer: we were just-

scar cut him off.

scar: commander, who are we attacking tommorrow?

scorpio: thats for me to know and you to find out.

suddenly the bush behind them rustled.
scar turned around quickly.

scorpio: what is it, scar?

scar: I just thought I saw... its nothing. you should go inside and rest up for tommorow.

commander scorpio went back inside the palace, and scar turned back around to the bush that had rustled. he had indeed seen what he thought he'd seen. for right now, a blood red hedgehog was speeding through the forest around the castle with a stolen ruby in his hand.
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tell me what you think. should I continue?

[Bahamas]

The format looks like a RP. Have you ever even read a book?

[spyke the hedgehog]

I know it looks like an rp. I did it that way because I felt like it.

and what kind of dumbass asks someone if they've read a book?

I don't need your opinion on how to write my stories.

I do it like I want. Its not your story anyway, so why do you care?

you can go shove yourself up a faggot horse's maggoty ass.

[EnigmaEchidna]

spyke the hedgehog, on Apr 9 2005, 09:50 PM, said:

I know it looks like an rp. I did it that way because I felt like it.

and what kind of dumbass asks someone if they've read a book?

I don't need your opinion on how to write my stories.

I do it like I want. Its not your story anyway, so why do you care?

you can go shove yourself up a faggot horse's maggoty ass.

would you like your thread locked and a warning point?

[Bahamas]

It's not a story, it's a one man RP.

[sonictk]

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I know it looks like an rp. I did it that way because I felt like it.

and what kind of dumbass asks someone if they've read a book?

I don't need your opinion on how to write my stories.

I do it like I want. Its not your story anyway, so why do you care?

you can go shove yourself up a faggot horse's maggoty ass.

I wonder why people like you even bother writing fanfics if this is what you come up with when someone makes a comment.

[Violet]

Unless you can call it script writing, (which at the moment, the plotting doesn't look like it) then you need to either write properly, or learn what scripting is.

[spyke the hedgehog]

alright, alright, I'm sorry. I shouldn't have have responded so harshley.
Just having a bad night I guess. had this huge emotional fight with my mother. And, if I get bad comments for writing it like an RP, I'll write it like a real book. okay? I appologized. happy?

[Bahamas]

Yes. Write it like a story.

[spyke the hedgehog]

Alright, Ill have the next part up soon.