[Lord_Vega]

This is the story of how Lord Vega got his powers and how he came to be. If you want to read then do so. If not then stop.

Along time ago. When emerl was made. Many fear this being cause of its power. So if it became uncontrol able they needed a plan. They made a new vision of the old one. Called Lord Vega. Its will fight emerl when it gone crazy it will fight it. But unlike emerl it can't copy attacks. But they gave it the power of chaos. And a sword that holds in this power. This is the power that is found in the emeralds.
But they put it in a long long sleep. Until emerl finds a link that is powerful. During this time it was sleeping it trained, and trained. Until it mastered the power of chaos and this sword that can hold this power. When sonic found emerl it awakened and was on a search for its target. He found it when it was with shadow. He wanted to destroy emerl when he was alone. For a while it waited, and waited, for a the time to attack. When he found emerl alone on the death egg he was about to strike. But he stop he learned emerl had not gone crazy and he should not attack him. But Sonic came and emerl fought for the last time. Emerl died. But he was to kill him not Sonic. If he can't do what he was made for, then what can
he do? This is his story of happyness, sadness, hate, and joy.

I'll post more it later if you want me to.

[Bahamas]

You suck. That is perhaps some of the worst literature I have ever seen. You never use commas, and have so many sentance fragments I could plotz. Plus, the first 5 or so sentances don't work at all.

[Lord_Vega]

Stuck Rat, on Apr 2 2005, 02:34 AM, said:

You suck. That is perhaps some of the worst literature I have ever seen. You never use commas, and have so many sentance fragments I could plotz. Plus, the first 5 or so sentances don't work at all.

Ok fine close the damn thing. Like I said it was my first time doing this stuff. So why don't you fucking sue me for even makeing the chararter!

This post has been edited by Lord_Vega: 02 April 2005 - 08:50 AM

[Bahamas]

I would but lawyers are expensive.

[Lord_Vega]

Stuck Rat, on Apr 2 2005, 03:40 AM, said:

I would but lawyers are expensive.

Just for that say hello to my new friend

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[Bahamas]

[Sway]

Okay, moving on...

[Violet]

Sorry, but Stuck Rat is right. This could of used a lot more detail and effort :/. Even my character description is longer than this.

And use MS Word for grammar and stuff, that is what I do. It's appalling.

[EnigmaEchidna]

I make it a tendency to not say aword about someone elses fanfic unless a flame war is about to start.

Listen if you want to write a story or essay you need to back up what you're saying and try to get your point across better. I know you can write a better fancharacter story then this. It shows promise but needs a lot of work. Try elaborating on your character, try to use descriptions, and use an outline or somesort of framework when you write. It will give you a tremendous and stable foundation for your work

[sonictk]

Should this even be considered a fanfic?

[EnigmaEchidna]

It has the foundation of one

[Cookie Monster]

Thats just the polite moderators way of saying that it needs work coz it stinks at present.

[sonictk]

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Thats just the polite moderators way of saying that it needs a hell of a lot more work coz it stinks at present.

Fixed.

[Cookie Monster]

Thanks man

[Lord_Vega]

Just close this thing will you.