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The Adventures of Jerry the Kitsune An amazing story about a character going to hell and back

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Posted 20 August 2011 - 12:07 AM

This is a story about my OC Jerry the Kitsune, with a plot that's going to involve action, drama, and romance!

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Quick Bio about Jerry: He likes to run and is faster than Miles but not as Sonic. He can fly five times as long as Miles but he can't spin his tails like a propeller. His fishing is on par of that of big however he doesn't have a friend to keep him company when he is fishing like Big does (Froggy). His weakness is Kyrptonite.

Anyways I'll get started on posting it (I've had two chapters written for about a week now.)

Jerry went outside one morning to his yard in and heard the booming sound of a giant gaping explosion.
"What was that!?" exclaimed Jerry.
He took a moment to ponder where the explosion was.
"It sounded like it came from Station Square!" Jerry realized.
When Jerry had arrived at Station Square he saw Eggman launching Nukes at Sky Scrapers laughing maniacally while he did so. He figured he'd let Sonic do all the work as he normally does but then he noticed something that caught his eye. There was a giant spike rising through the streets, and pierced through that spike was the limp, lifeless body of a clearly recognizable blue hedgehog.
"N-No! It can't be!" yelled Jerry.
He quickly flew over to Eggman dodging the flying nukes headed his way.
"Agh Tails get out of here you annoying vermin or I just might have to kill you!" said Eggman."
"You must mean Miles, which I am not, you are dealing with a much more serious threat here!"
"And who might that be?"
"Jerry the Kitsune!"
Dr. Eggman quickly launched a nuke at the off-guard Jerry which hit dead on and sent Jerry flying.
"Augh that really hurt, that depleted all of my rings!" Jerry said in pain.
He quickly flew around looking for a ring in the desolate wasteland that was once station square but he could not find one single ring. He saw that Dr. Eggman was launching more and more nukes at the innocent town and knew something had to be done. In a moment of desperation he flew full speed at Dr. Eggman not caring about his life
"Ah you die you little pest!" yelled Eggman as he launched a nuke at Jerry.
"NOW OR NEVER!!" yelled Jerry in what he thought was the last moment of his life.
Just then a random ring out of nowhere flew into Jerry right before the nuke made contact with him. The explosion of the nuke was so big it blew up Eggman's mini egg carrier which he rides around in all the time which caused Eggman to retreat.
"I-I-I'm alive?!? How?" Jerry said ringless and beaten.
The rest of the surviving townspeople came and lifted Jerry up with delight and joy.
"Thank you for saving us!"
"Thank you strange fox!"
"We love you hero!"
They all exclaimed.
The people of Station Square built a statue in honor of Jerry and his braveness on that day. But what about Sonic? And what happened to him on this fateful day? Where did this mysterious ring come from and who could have been behind it? To be continued....

END OF CHAPTER 1


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Posted 20 August 2011 - 04:54 AM

The character's name is so uninspired and repellent that I didn't even bother reading any of that bullshit. A kitsune? Really? What did you do, read someone's Guide to Bad Sonic Fan Characters and rip off one of the most stupid cliche species names on the list? Its a fucking poorly recolored Tails, and Tails is a fucking FOX. Lazy, unoriginal, and lame as hell.

Also, you're wasting your time posting here. This site is dead. Worthless. If you want your shit to actually receive attention, you may want to move elsewhere.

Just thought I would be helpful, since I was an ass in the first sentence or four.
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Posted 20 August 2011 - 05:02 AM

Wow...looks like I abandoned ship just in time.
R.I.P. Reu...

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Posted 20 August 2011 - 05:13 AM

View PostGold_TSG, on 20 August 2011 - 12:02 AM, said:

Wow...looks like I abandoned ship just in time.


YOU SHUT YOUR WHORE'S MOUTH, TRAITOR!!! Go back to AFTER and suckle on the Master's teat!
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