[hawk7865]

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This is what he looks like, only with a raccoon tail instead of a fox tail.

Name: Nickolai Davis
Age: 15
Gender: Male
Species: Raccoon. Fur: black and grey. Hair: Messy blonde.
Eyes: Yellow
Height: 4' 2"
Build: Thin, but tough
Attire: Orange long-sleeved shirt, green scarf, black cargo pants, blue boarding goggles.
Theme Words
First: Gunslinger
Ability/Item 1: Barrage
Unleashes a flurry of bullets from his pistol that does moderate damage. Takes 1 post to reload.
Ability/Item 2: Snipe Shot
Aims carefully at a critical component or part of an enemy and fired at it. Causes massive damage. Requires recharge or calm down for 1 post.
Second: Swordsmanship
Ability/Item 1: Lunging Style
Unleashes a triple strike on his enemy, first aiming for their arms, then torso.
Ability/Item 2: Overhead Strike
Leaps up into the air and swings down as hard as he can at the enemy. Requires 1 post to calm down.
Third: Agility/Unarmed Combat
Ability/Item 1: Fighting Dirty
Nick gets in close to the enemy and pummels him/her with all he's got.
Ability/Item 2: Flying Kick
Leaps into the air and attempts to kick the target in the head.

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Roleplaying

Backstory
Nick was born to goodly parents in the mobian capital. His father and mother were both in the military. He enjoyed life until the age of ten, when Robotnik invaded and his parents were killed before his very eyes. He managed to escape and join the resistance. He was taught the ways of combat by his friend he met in the resistance, Justin the Echidna. Three years have past and the war rages on.

Example Post:

Nick pulled his scarf around his neck and shuddered. It was cold in this part of the forest, but he didn't know why. "C'mon, men, their base is around here somewhere..." he said, making a sweeping gesture to his men. They hesitantly got up, shouldered their weapons and followed their captain.

This post has been edited by hawk7865: 09 December 2009 - 04:31 AM

[NiGHTS Noob]

You only get two abilities per theme word, and they're each a theme word, not theme words. You can't have two words for one theme word. It might not seem like a big deal, but rules stretch pretty quickly so we have to keep them tight.

Also, Super Mode is a no, sorry, can't do it. Also, he can't sustain 10 recoil damage. He only has 10 vitality.

Oh, and you have hardly any description for your moves. Exactly what benefits do the special skills have over regular attacks? If they give you a bonus, and they aren't a passive skill, they usually (not always, but usually) need some kind of extra cost as well.

Other than that, you seemed to understand the character sheet fairly well.

Here's a tip though, you can combine your first two sword abilities so that his entire sword style is a stabbing/lunging rapier style, however you also need one of those two ability slots to be a sword, so you're going to have to decide whether you want the lunging specialty, or the special swinging attack.

[hawk7865]

Sorry, i'm a noob.

Ninja edit: Yes, and I'm THE Noob.

This post has been edited by NiGHTS Noob: 28 November 2009 - 12:16 AM
Reason for edit:: Because I can

[hawk7865]

Ok, all fixed. Better now?

[NiGHTS Noob]

Not quite.

Just call 'Handgun Mastery' 'Handgun' or 'Gunslinger' or something.

With the swordsmanship, you can keep it as it is, but he's got no basic sword skills. Sword styles take up a slot, the way he's got it, he's got those two swings and then the same amount of skill as someone who just picks a sword off the ground for the first time in their life, his defense is going to be full of wholes, he'll swing awkwardly, and he won't be very fast or powerful with it. You can either just rely on those two special skills or you can choose one of them and replace the other one with a sword style (like a said, you can give him a lunging based style that will give you a psudeo version of your first technique).

As for all your skills, still don't have enough detail. We're not asking for much, but how much damage does it do if it fully connects? Is it fast, slow, or somewhere in between? Is there anything special he can do with it?

Also, your backstory and example post aren't quite long enough, but that's an easy fix.