[DanteDavis]

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[Fireblaze]

As usual I'm my critical self today.
Well, the panels sizes are kinda odd.
The sprite (Nova I'm assuming) looks to be a recolor, until panel three where he's got some clothes.
Try to put some clothes that are different colors than his fur on, and maybe shade them a bit.
Also, socks don't frequently go over pants.
The Eggman sprite is a bit oddly resized.
The text box looks a little big considering it's two words.
Most of your sound effects have extra gray or white pixels, sometimes a lot.
Horizontally, it's unneccessarily(sp?) large, considering the massive amounts of blank space.

[DanteDavis]

I promise you there will be better

[DanteDavis]

#2 read on...

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[Racerhog]

hmm...the comic is pretty good...hmmmm...I thinks...te character need some extra ligths and tones, but well...good

[DanteDavis]

Racerhog, on 05 September 2009 - 06:39 PM, said:

hmm...the comic is pretty good...hmmmm...I thinks...te character need some extra ligths and tones, but well...good

Just wait til the fights come in

[DanteDavis]

Well heres # 3!!!

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[Racerhog]

hmm...it's has a very good history, i think...i better wait when te main history is finished, pretty good

[Fireblaze]

#2- same problems as before, plus awkward dialogue in panel 4, jumping superfar in panel five, and random black thing that doesn't even have the decency to show up in the next comic.
#3- Aformentioned black thing is gone, the action lines are a bit odd, text sticking out of bubble, 5th panel is kinda unneccessary. Panel 3, you might want to try changing the facial expression a bit. VRAASH also sounds a bit odd in the context of a flying fireball, but whatever on that one.

[DanteDavis]

Fireblaze, on 06 September 2009 - 05:52 AM, said:

#2- same problems as before, plus awkward dialogue in panel 4, jumping superfar in panel five, and random black thing that doesn't even have the decency to show up in the next comic.
#3- Aformentioned black thing is gone, the action lines are a bit odd, text sticking out of bubble, 5th panel is kinda unneccessary. Panel 3, you might want to try changing the facial expression a bit. VRAASH also sounds a bit odd in the context of a flying fireball, but whatever on that one.

where can i find sound effects?

[Fireblaze]

DanteDavis, on 06 September 2009 - 09:15 AM, said:

where can i find sound effects?

I think there might be some on MFZ, but I usually just write them in in text form.
Just size 16, white italics, that kind of thing.

[Racerhog]

DanteDavis, on 06 September 2009 - 10:15 AM, said:

where can i find sound effects?

well...I think I can help you whith it (sorry for that word XD) and...

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#2- same problems as before, plus awkward dialogue in panel 4, jumping superfar in panel five, and random black thing that doesn't even have the decency to show up in the next comic.
#3- Aformentioned black thing is gone, the action lines are a bit odd, text sticking out of bubble, 5th panel is kinda unneccessary. Panel 3, you might want to try changing the facial expression a bit. VRAASH also sounds a bit odd in the context of a flying fireball, but whatever on that one.

it is complicated for him, give him a chance to show us something better

[DanteDavis]

tell some body about this okay? heres #4

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[Racerhog]

Well...it is well...your comic is going better little by little!, and...I can join? if your point is yes, here is my incomplete sprite sheet:



Salu2 (in spanish xD yeaaa!)

[DanteDavis]

Racerhog, on 06 September 2009 - 09:11 PM, said:

Well...it is well...your comic is going better little by little!, and...I can join? if your point is yes, here is my incomplete sprite sheet:



Salu2 (in spanish xD yeaaa!)

okay you can join, just tell me these 3 things; #1 what is your power?(wind,water,fire,ect.)
#2 don't blame me for what you say
#3 make more sprites, before saga2 or #20

[DanteDavis]

Heres #5 getting closer to my goal!

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[Racerhog]

all right! Im making more sprites, well...powers...only can send atacks finger its xDDD, well, for the moment that, well...im still working on it!



it's incompleted for the moment, just wait ;D

[DanteDavis]

Racerhog, on 07 September 2009 - 01:10 AM, said:

all right! Im making more sprites, well...powers...only can send atacks finger its xDDD, well, for the moment that, well...im still working on it!

hmmm...i have big plans for him

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[Fireblaze]

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it is complicated for him, give him a chance to show us something better

That's, well, the point of criticism.

#4 - Still huge text, slightly awkward late reaction in panel 2, words poking out of bubble in panel 3, the fight was a bit odd.

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#1 what is your power?(wind,water,fire,ect.)

This makes me a sad panda.

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#2 don't blame me for what you say

May I ask what this means?

#5 - first three panels are kinda not needed, the first part of the fight was a bit hard for me to catch. Hasn't Sonic done that trick like a billion times? And I was pretty sure Kimemaru(how on earth do you spell these Naruto names) had better reflexes than that. Last two are continuity-type problems, so I guess they're not utterly neccessary to fix, but just FYI.

[DanteDavis]

#2 means that idon't blame me for what the character says.