[Dark Awesome]

Hello!
Someone from another forum I go to asked me to post his comics in a few places, so I'm doing that.
Here's the first one.

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[Fireblaze]

Wow, uh...
Firstly, the Sonic recolor isn't all that great.
The "I'm the author and I'm strong" thing is overdone.
The text boxes are kind of...oversized, and have a lot of room in them. Try either color-coded something or bubbles with actual tails instead of little lines.
The characters jump around a lot.
Dialogue is pretty awkward.
Cyrax's mouth is blue in panel 4.
It's kinda big in terms of width.
Could be worse, I suppose, but not by a lot.

On the plus side, your grammar isn't horrible.

[Dark Awesome]

Here's the next one!

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This post has been edited by Dark Awesome: 08 September 2009 - 05:42 PM

[Fireblaze]

Let's see...
It appears you've bolded your text. Can be useful, but I'd recommend spacing it from the sides.
Boxes are still huge.
Your grammar has gone from "decent" to "above internet average" which is not a good thing.
Jumping around has decreased, that's good.
Dialogue is kinda awkward.
Looks like you're going into your first story arc. Good luck.
If you can, you might want to upload to photobucket or something like that instead of just attaching, as it's slightly easier to view.

[Dark Awesome]

Here's the next one!

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[Green]

I have to agree with everything Blaze said about this, the recolor is one of the most unoriginal I have ever seen. All you did was make sonic a lighter shade of blue. You should have changed up the quills, maybe added some clothes, changed the shoes, at least something else.

[Dark Awesome]

Here's a new one.

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[Dark Awesome]

Here's number 5!

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