[SuperSonicComix]

Oops, let me redo this with the "Correct Format".

Info
Name:Shock
Age:15
Gender:Male
Species:Hedgehog
Fur/feather/scale/skin:Fur
Eyes:yellow, green, or sometimes red, depending on his mood.
Height:3'5
Build: Light, thin shoulders. Hes not fat, hes pretty thin in all aspects.
Attire: Yellow boots, a black Hood he wears to hide his head and face.

Weapon Slots
1)Plasma blaster *'Tis isnt off Halo, Hypo, its something i made up. I dont play Halo much, and i forgot this was in it*

2)Short Sword. What do you mean by specyfing the type of sword? -.-

3)-

4)-

Stats:

Strength: 25
Agility: 10
Vitality: 15

Lesser skills::

Weapon Skill: 5
Driving: 5
Knowledge: 5
Air Riding: 5
Swimming: 5
Climbing: 5
Jumping: 5
Stealth: 10
Running: 5

Character Development

Backstory: He was born on angel island, being ignored by every living thing there. He was there before it became a massive robot-overtaken island. One day, he saw a blue blur pass by. He watched it, then realized he could be following it. He did so, staying a little distance behind, so he would not be seen. When the hedgehog turned around, he dove into the bushes. Then the hedgehog would conitnue running, and so would shock. He followed sonic through all his adventures, from 16-bit to 3d.

Personality: Nice, he likes people, and likes to make freinds. Nothing much else to say

This post has been edited by SuperSonicComix: 14 January 2009 - 07:10 PM

[SuperSonicComix]

Redoing this one as well.


Info
Name:Frostfur
Age:Unknown
Gender:Male
Species:Wolf
Fur/feather/scale/skin:Fur
Eyes:light blue
Height:Fang's hight.
Build: Fang's build.
Attire: Wears a black hooded cloak, and sheaths his longsword on his back. He wears black boots. He never takes the clock off, only unhoods it.

Weapon Slots
1)Longsword

2)katana

3)-pistol

4)-rocket launcher (not much ammo left.

Stats:

Strength: 25
Agility: 10
Vitality: 15

Lesser skills::

Weapon Skill: 5
Driving: 5
Knowledge: 5
Air Riding: 5
Swimming: 5
Climbing: 5
Jumping: 5
Stealth: 10
Running: 5

Character Development

Backstory: Unknown

Personality: Evil, sometimes good. He picks which path seems best.

This post has been edited by SuperSonicComix: 06 January 2009 - 11:41 PM

[Fireblaze]

No offence or anything, but Shock's quills kinda go downward, as opposed to upward as you describe(You said they make him taller). If they really do go upward, try to show it in your drawing, or make a sprite of him which is more than a recolor.

Thier heights should be a little more descriptive, particularly with Frostfur. By the way, is the Fang which you are referring to Fang(AKA Nack, a weasel) from certain Sonic games, or the one from my comic?
Final thing, it seems odd that Frostfur would have a Flame form.

Done nagging, sorry if I'm out-of-bounds or whatever.

This post has been edited by Fireblaze: 06 January 2009 - 11:37 PM

[SuperSonicComix]

Hey, no problem. I appreciate any help. And by making him taller, i meant his top spine loops up high. Like frontward pictures of sonic.

[SuperSonicComix]

Blaze? Can you help me out with the biographies? I dont know how to do all the +10 shit, im just used to normal old roleplay where we mess around, im not used to fighting and stuff..

[Fireblaze]

SuperSonicComix, on Jan 7 2009, 11:17 AM, said:

Blaze? Can you help me out with the biographies? I dont know how to do all the +10 shit, im just used to normal old roleplay where we mess around, im not used to fighting and stuff..

I really don't know much about it either, but if you give me a little time I could come up with something. I'm used to the same thing as you, honestly, but I'll do my best.

[SuperSonicComix]

Thanks. Only reason i asked you in particular was because cookie told me she didnt have a idea, and told me to ask you. Im about to post how Fang and Frostfur met in a comic in Sonic Adventures.

[Fireblaze]

Alright, so.
As far as I have it figured, here's how it goes:
For the main stats and lesser skills(weapon skill, driving, knowledge, etc), you can only spend 50 points total. Each lesser skill costs 10 points, so you don't want to use all your points in either one.
With the weapon slots, it depends on whether you're using a ranged or melee weapon to determine its stats. With melee based weapons, you give 10 points among offensive(attacking), defensive(defending), and specialities. With ranged, you give them to offensive and ammo, getting three ammo for each point given there.

[SuperSonicComix]

i see..Somewhat..You can quote and edit those, and ill use what you come up with. But are the biographies i did messed up or did i do it wrong? Like, do you have to have ammo and such?

[Fireblaze]

SuperSonicComix, on Jan 6 2009, 03:22 PM, said:

Oops, let me redo this with the "Correct Format".

Info
Name:Shock
Age:15
Gender:Male
Species:Hedgehog
Fur/feather/scale/skin:Orange Fur
Eyes:yellow, green, or sometimes red, depending on his mood.
Height:uhm...Sonics height. a little taller.
Build: Ok, ill whisper so it doesnt insult him. (HES A FATASS FREAK OF NATURE!) Nah, kidding. Hes sonics build.
Attire: Yellow boots.

Weapon Slots
1)Plasma blaster (Offense 6, ammo 4)

2)Sword (Offense 7, Defense 3)

3)-

4)-

Stats:

Strength: 15
Agility: 10
Vitality: 15

Lesser skills::

Stealth: 10

Character Development

Backstory: He was born on angel island, being ignored by every living thing there. He was there before it became a massive robot-overtaken island. One day, he saw a blue blur pass by. He watched it, then realized he could be following it. He did so, staying a little distance behind, so he would not be seen. When the hedgehog turned around, he dove into the bushes. Then the hedgehog would conitnue running, and so would shock. He followed sonic through all his adventures, from 16-bit to 3d.

Personality: Nice, he likes people, and likes to make freinds. Nothing much else to say

Here's one for shock, except you also need to make a post of how you would RP with him. I can't really do that one.

[Movetron]

The first one is a Mary Sue. No offense.

[HTM]

I'm going to deal with both, typing on what is bad and, well, bad in an acceptable way, so here goes:

SuperSonicComix, on Jan 6 2009, 11:22 PM, said:

Info
Name:Shock
Age:15
Gender:Male
Species:Hedgehog
Fur/feather/scale/skin:Fur
Eyes:yellow, green, or sometimes red, depending on his mood.
Height:uhm...Sonics height. a little taller.
Build: Ok, ill whisper so it doesnt insult him. (HES A FATASS FREAK OF NATURE!) Nah, kidding. Hes sonics build.
Attire: Yellow boots.

Weapon Slots
1)Plasma blaster

2)Sword

3)-

4)-

Stats:

Strength: 25
Agility: 10
Vitality: 15

Lesser skills::

Weapon Skill: 5
Driving: 5
Knowledge: 5
Air Riding: 5
Swimming: 5
Climbing: 5
Jumping: 5
Stealth: 10
Running: 5

Character Development

Backstory: He was born on angel island, being ignored by every living thing there. He was there before it became a massive robot-overtaken island. One day, he saw a blue blur pass by. He watched it, then realized he could be following it. He did so, staying a little distance behind, so he would not be seen. When the hedgehog turned around, he dove into the bushes. Then the hedgehog would conitnue running, and so would shock. He followed sonic through all his adventures, from 16-bit to 3d.

Personality: Nice, he likes people, and likes to make freinds. Nothing much else to say

First of all, now I won't complain about the name, 'cuz I've ranted about that on another topic, and the age, well, cannot be argued about.
Species. If you haven't noticed, the species "hedgehog" probably makes up from more than 75% of all Sonic fancharacters. But that's OK, since I have three hedgehogs as well. I'm gonna change them later on anyways. The "Fur/feather/scale/skin" thing is supposed to say f.ex "Scale, green" or "Fur, purple". Not just "Fur" or something.
How the hell can one's eye-color change? Even so depending on the mood?! It's physically impossible.
The height and build shouldn't be something resembling to a canon character. It shouldn't. Ever. So he would be, what, 3'4" or 3'5"? Describe it like that, please, not something saying "uhm...Sonics height. a little taller." or something. It just makes you look like an uncreative son of a bitch. Not saying that you are, of course.
Only yellow boots? No gloves? No coat? No shorts? No shirt? Nothing else but BOOTS?! That's quite... Plain.
So he has a plasma blaster? What, what is this, Halo? They also need a profile, mind you. And just saying "Sword" won't help. I think a "military knife" would be appropriate. Yeah.
I think that the Stats bar and the Lesser Skills are both using the same total number of 50. Each lesser skill uses something by 10, meaning a total of 40 used on the Stats. Two lesser skills would obviously cost 20, should they even be costing 10 in the first place, (Blame my memorybank located in the brain.) meaning a total number of 30 in Stats and so on.
The backstory is utterly CRAZY! It's bad, as in "I fucking hate this type of fancharies!" thing. So he was born on Angel Island. From what I understand, and which is probably false, only the Echidnas were actually "born" there. And not only that, why how the FUCK did he see "the Blue Blur", it's interfering with the canon! He's a freaking blue blur, what in the world would he be doing right there Shock was? And why was Shock even hiding from him in the first place? No one can follow Sonic, and if Shock had the capabilities to follow Sonic, he would be able to turn Super (Solaris in Sonic The Hedgehog), which is also interfering with the canon, and would be able to fly (Metal Sonic in Sonic Heroes). From 16-bit to 3d... Get an original background, please.
Oh, and everyone ignoring him? So he could run around completely naked without no one noticing? Wow, that would be a sad childhood. And speaking of childhood, why the fuck would his parents ignore him? Why was he even ignored in the first place? Some kind of "retardation"?!
The Personality cannot really be argued, but it sure is overused. He has no sort of mental illness like you(Just kidding, don't worry about it)? He is nice, why the heck did he follow Sonic? Who are his friends then, how could he even get friends when he was following Sonic non-stop?

SuperSonicComix, on Jan 6 2009, 11:26 PM, said:

Info
Name:Frostfur
Age:Unknown
Gender:Male
Species:Wolf
Fur/feather/scale/skin:Fur
Eyes:light blue
Height:Fang's hight.
Build: Fang's build.
Attire: Wears a black hooded cloak, and sheaths his longsword on his back. He wears black boots. He never takes the clock off, only unhoods it.

Weapon Slots
1)Longsword

2)katana

3)-pistol

4)-rocket launcher (not much ammo left.

Stats:

Strength: 25
Agility: 10
Vitality: 15

Lesser skills::

Weapon Skill: 5
Driving: 5
Knowledge: 5
Air Riding: 5
Swimming: 5
Climbing: 5
Jumping: 5
Stealth: 10
Running: 5

Character Development

Backstory: Unknown

Personality: Evil, sometimes good. He picks which path seems best.

Frostfur is a bad name, but I won't regard it. I'm going to abbrevate his name into FF, just so you know.
The unknown age shouldn't EVER be used on a fancharacter. One ALWAYS knows ones age, no matter WHAT!
Only the fur again!
Now there's a change in the eye section. Light blue. Approved!
Height and build, as explained before, should be described appropriately, not focusing on any character at all!
Can't argue the black cloak, but sheathing the longsword on the back? I only find that appropriate for claymores, not longswords, shortswords, swords, knives and daggers. (I've been playing Oblivion too much lately)
He never takes his clock off?!
So he has two types of swords, a longsword and a katana? You only need one. And where the heck did he get them from?
Pistol is approvable, but I laughed when I saw the Rocket Launcher (not much ammo left). Not good to have around. How would you react when someone would walk around with a rocket launcher, a pistol, a katana and a longsword? I'd run away and call the police. Call me a wuss, but it's in the human psyche to resort to help when a human sees potential danger. Or something like that.
I've already warned about the stats, so yeah.
The backstory is a no no. NO NO NO NO! CAPS lock is SERIOUS business!
The personality is a no no as well. Be more descriptive. Please!

[NiGHTS Noob]

Wow, it's like you guys are fixing these for me! Thanks, I've been kind of busy.

OK, even though Hypo basically ranted it out, he is right for the development stuff, and Fireblaze nailed all the stats stuff on the head (nice job on that by the way), except for the fact that you get 3 shots for every point in ammo so it should read like ammo-4(12).

Also, for your other two slots, you can use them for stat buffers or supped up versions of lesser skills since it seems like you might want to fill out his character a bit.

Also here's something, your characters have elemental names, but are instead loaded down with nothing but stock weaponry. See something odd here?

I'd suggest clarifying your characters a little bit in terms of description. The clothes section is bland, and just saying "Fang's height" is pretty stupid. Is every person the same height? Why should anthropomorphic animals be?

As a reference, Sonic's been estimated at about 3'3" and 77 lbs. Judging by build.

Fang's between 3'2" and 3'4", and somewhere between 70 and 84 lbs.

Smaller animals in Sonic tend to be around these heights, really small animals like Charmy are more in the 2'-2'6" range, and big characters like Vector are in the upper range of 4' all the way into 5' or 6' with Bark.

[SuperSonicComix]

LOLWUT?

[SuperSonicComix]

Errr..Im just going to have Fireblaze do these for me..Sorry but i dont have time to read hypo's WHOLE FUCKING POST. Not saying it isnt descriptive, or helpful, cuz it was. I appreciate as much as i read ^^ And fireblaze, thanks too. Nights your lucky you have such good little helpers.

[Fireblaze]

SuperSonicComix, on Jan 12 2009, 04:45 PM, said:

Errr..Im just going to have Fireblaze do these for me..Sorry but i dont have time to read hypo's WHOLE FUCKING POST. Not saying it isnt descriptive, or helpful, cuz it was. I appreciate as much as i read ^^ And fireblaze, thanks too. Nights your lucky you have such good little helpers.

Alrighty. It'll take me a while, but I'd be glad to do it! Expect several changes in most areas.

[HTM]

SuperSonicComix, on Jan 13 2009, 12:45 AM, said:

Errr..Im just going to have Fireblaze do these for me..Sorry but i dont have time to read hypo's WHOLE FUCKING POST. Not saying it isnt descriptive, or helpful, cuz it was. I appreciate as much as i read ^^ And fireblaze, thanks too. Nights your lucky you have such good little helpers.

I LoL'd a bit. Yes, it is freaking long in my opinion as well. Goes to show you how much I hate unoriginal fandom made stuff. No offense.

[NiGHTS Noob]

If Fireblaze makes the characters you aren't using them, normally I don't have a problem with characters made by two people, but by the way you typed it it sounds like you're just being lazy.

You can't eat the candy if you don't take the time to go trick or treating. If you put forth a little more effort with the backstories, designs, and example posts, and just have Fireblaze figure out your Slot and stat designs I'd be OK with that, but you can't just leave it all to him.

[SuperSonicComix]

Yes, all i need help with is the stats and such. Seeing as im used to fucking around like in a fun rp, im not used to this, like i explained. I can do the rest myself. Yes, i can change the height. 'Cept i dont know how high hedgehogs are supposed to be. So saying Sonic's height, i assumed you know his height. Saying Fang's height, i was assuming Blaze would tell me. So since he didnt, am i supposed to go fucking figure out how tall they are by searching around? Its not like it tells you that in ANY sonic games. And if you just made up the height and say thats the real height, how can you say the heights I say are made up too? And since Fang isnt a real sonic character, even after alot of searching, i wouldnt know unless i ask blaze. And hes hardly ever on. They're only on at 2:00 in the morning and i dont have time to be on here all the time waiting. And Blaze, i meant no offense to you at all in this post. Nor did i mean any to Nights or Hypo. I dont want to get my ass kicked off SOL. And no offense taken Hypo ^^

[Fireblaze]

SuperSonicComix, on Jan 13 2009, 11:40 AM, said:

Yes, all i need help with is the stats and such. Seeing as im used to fucking around like in a fun rp, im not used to this, like i explained. I can do the rest myself. Yes, i can change the height. 'Cept i dont know how high hedgehogs are supposed to be. So saying Sonic's height, i assumed you know his height. Saying Fang's height, i was assuming Blaze would tell me. So since he didnt, am i supposed to go fucking figure out how tall they are by searching around? Its not like it tells you that in ANY sonic games. And if you just made up the height and say thats the real height, how can you say the heights I say are made up too? And since Fang isnt a real sonic character, even after alot of searching, i wouldnt know unless i ask blaze. And hes hardly ever on. They're only on at 2:00 in the morning and i dont have time to be on here all the time waiting. And Blaze, i meant no offense to you at all in this post. Nor did i mean any to Nights or Hypo. I dont want to get my ass kicked off SOL. And no offense taken Hypo ^^

'Tis all good on my part. Just so you know, Sonic's been estimated around 3 feet 4 inches. Fang is about an inch taller than that normally, and about 3' 6" - 3' 7" in blade form.