[kazoka122]

Fireblaze, on Dec 24 2008, 12:46 AM, said:

It's good, and it's moving along fairly well.
Just stuff I said before: Separate bubbles, less empty space, more grammer.  And if you already made it, then I'm sure you could edit or remake them, to an extent.

true >_>

[kazoka122]

Ok 5 is much more grammerish and less empty space Oh and i basically added many things >_> see if u like this page

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[Fireblaze]

That's looking good.
Size is pretty decent, not too much emptyness, and grammer is mostly checked and well written. Keep it up!
Oh, yeah, and when sprites are resized try to do it in multiples of 100. Looks nicer that way.

This post has been edited by Fireblaze: 24 December 2008 - 06:01 AM

[kazoka122]

Fireblaze, on Dec 24 2008, 12:59 AM, said:

That's looking good.
Size is pretty decent, not too much emptyness, and grammer is mostly checked and well written.  Keep it up!
Oh, yeah, and when sprites are resized try to do it in multiples of 100.  Looks nicer that way.

Are u talking about the explosion or the boom??? Oh and part 6

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This post has been edited by kazoka122: 24 December 2008 - 06:10 AM

[kazoka122]

BUMP

[kazoka122]

Well ill just add the next one heres 7 tell me what u think....

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[kazoka122]

heres page 8

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[Eternal-the-Hedgehog]

Nice comic! I totally suck at those kinds of comics.

[kazoka122]

Eternal-the-Hedgehog, on Dec 28 2008, 04:03 AM, said:

Nice comic! I totally suck at those kinds of comics.

Finally someone posted something, i was gonna stop but since u said it was good ill continue just for u eternal

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[kazoka122]

kazoka122, on Jan 10 2009, 04:09 AM, said:

Finally someone posted something, i was gonna stop but since u said it was good ill continue just for u eternal

i made two typos....away and out >_> ill be WAY more careful next time

[Fireblaze]

Well, Eggy, the alert screen and robo thing keep jumping around to different spots.
Sentence structure needs work, put some commas in there and think about how something would sound and add punctuation based on that.
Last panel is oddly resized, it has very different dimensions. You might want to resize in sets of 100s.