[kazoka122]

hey guys im new here so i decided to enter my first sonic comic see if u like it XD this is the title so far >_>

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[kazoka122]

page 1 correct me if u want XD

[kazoka122]

page 1, correct me if u want

This post has been edited by kazoka122: 24 December 2008 - 04:07 AM

[cheese duck]

Hi newbie! pleas don't post the same thing twice and nice pic

[kazoka122]

cheese duck, on Dec 23 2008, 11:10 PM, said:

Hi newbie! pleas don't post the same thing twice and nice pic

sorry im new to this website and my computer keeps double posting >_>

[kazoka122]

kazoka122, on Dec 23 2008, 11:13 PM, said:

sorry im new to this website and my computer keeps double posting >_>

also do u know how to delete topics?

[Fireblaze]

Clashing sprite styles, even in a poster, are no good.
Let's see an actual comic before I judge though, meh?
[/comicnazi]

[cheese duck]

k! can't wait to see your comic!
Edit: darn it! you finished posting befor me!

This post has been edited by cheese duck: 24 December 2008 - 04:17 AM

[Fireblaze]

kazoka122, on Dec 23 2008, 09:14 PM, said:

also do u know how to delete topics?

PM a mod to request this, I'm pretty sure.

[kazoka122]

why wont it upload T_T.....hold on guys im trying to upload page 1

[kazoka122]

-ignore-

This post has been edited by kazoka122: 24 December 2008 - 04:33 AM

[kazoka122]

YES ok ummm fire i think u going to judge this like crazy but go ahead thats how people learn XD anyways...page 1 enjoy! or not.

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This post has been edited by kazoka122: 24 December 2008 - 04:37 AM

[kazoka122]

part 2 >_> -by the way the card thing is like commercials so i just show a random card with a random sonic character that appeared in my comic

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This post has been edited by kazoka122: 24 December 2008 - 05:01 AM

[Fireblaze]

Judgement day time!
I was going to say the bubbles should be opaque, but you covered that. Um...
Put the bubbles in the order they are said, top to bottom, left to right. And try to make all the bubble similar in shape, unless it's thought or something. It looks more cohesive.
And, last but not least, use some more grammer. It helps if it can be read with no problems.
I'll probably add more next comic.
Happy comicing!
EDIT: Also, it'd probably be good to make separate bubbles for each character unless they are all saying the same thing.

This post has been edited by Fireblaze: 24 December 2008 - 05:08 AM

[kazoka122]

Fireblaze, on Dec 24 2008, 12:07 AM, said:

Judgement day time!
I was going to say the bubbles should be opaque, but you covered that.  Um...
Put the bubbles in the order they are said, top to bottom, left to right.  And try to make all the bubble similar in shape, unless it's thought or something.  It looks more cohesive.
And, last but not least, use some more grammer.  It helps if it can be read with no problems.
I'll probably add more next comic.
Happy comicing!
EDIT: Also, it'd probably be good to make separate bubbles for each character unless they are all saying the same thing.

for the last part i only do that to robots
for the order part i'll use numbers
for the grammer part ill try

ps:i told u u were gonna judge XD

[Muzzy Roberto]

You don't want to have large empty spaces of text bubble.

[kazoka122]

Muzzy Roberto, on Dec 24 2008, 12:20 AM, said:

You don't want to have large empty spaces of text bubble.

oh ok, page 3 ill do the orders by my 8th comic

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[Fireblaze]

Well, I only just thought of this, but you have quite large panels considering how much is in them. There's a lot of empty space just kinda hanging there. I'd recommend either shrinking the panels or using more room.

[kazoka122]

Fireblaze, on Dec 24 2008, 12:33 AM, said:

Well, I only just thought of this, but you have quite large panels considering how much is in them.  There's a lot of empty space just kinda hanging there.  I'd recommend either shrinking the panels or using more room.

well I'm just using it as a environment sort of thing >_>. Know what i mean? Oh and page 4...Also if u wondering how im makeing them quick they been made im just putting them one by one seeing if u guys like it or not sooooo do u?

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[Fireblaze]

It's good, and it's moving along fairly well.
Just stuff I said before: Separate bubbles, less empty space, more grammer. And if you already made it, then I'm sure you could edit or remake them, to an extent.