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Sonic:Chapter 1 Heroes Destiney my first comic,although a little messed

#1 User is offline   Sucaru Icon

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Post icon  Posted 30 September 2007 - 01:56 PM

here i go....
this is my first comic,but i made the first issue too big so i had to cut part one in half.
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that is the first half.
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so what u guys think? :unsure:
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Dragon of Light,

Cast sorrows from the sky,

The Sun is born.

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Dragon of Darkness,

Lives a shadow for eternity,

The Moon is born.

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Tower of the sky,

Story of Life,

The Twin Dragons take their turns,

Silver Dragon,

Gold Dragon,

To bring the Tower down.

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The Dawn of Reckoning is near,

Shadows of Oblivion,

Destroy the Gold Dragon,

Life as we know it is gone.

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The Shadow Dragon emerges.
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Posted 30 September 2007 - 03:38 PM

Okay: First off, resize the sprite so that they're larger, cut the panels down so there's no so much empty space, text boxes should not have a line of text then a big box of empty white space
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Posted 30 September 2007 - 05:42 PM

Also, try using real sprite backgrounds from the games or even other games as well. It gives it a nicer feel. Also, the comic didn't make much sense. D:
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