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#1 User is offline   SONICROXS Icon

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Posted 23 September 2007 - 11:25 PM

here is my first comic. Credit to hyper for the rouge sprites,and Danielsidney for shadow and knuckles sprites. WARNING IF YOU DO NOT LIKE LOVE COMEDY DON'T READ.

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Posted 24 September 2007 - 12:41 AM

Overall, it was really good. I like the caption where Knuckles was in the Megaman upgrade tube. I'm looking forward to more.
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Posted 24 September 2007 - 01:17 AM

I love comedy! But, I see no comedy here.

Some pointers, perhaps?

BACKGROUNDS. People like backgrounds, I've noticed... they're also fond of proper spelling, too. Avoid shorthand, like 'U' for 'You', '2' for 'to', etc.
Really, it's just a few extra seconds of work that makes all the difference in the world.

Other than that, though, the body language was pretty good.
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Posted 25 September 2007 - 03:16 AM

Thanks for replying. more will be coming soon,tomorrow perhaps.
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Posted 26 September 2007 - 03:39 AM

Here you go.(please vote. I want the readers choice)

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Posted 26 September 2007 - 03:25 PM

Much better. A mite nonsensical, but nothing I can recommend about that

Oh, and I vote Shadow goes for Tails.
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Posted 26 September 2007 - 09:59 PM

You need better speech bubbles. Boxes don't do it for me. And I guess... Amy?
"Pss, hey Guido, its all so clear to me now. I'm the keeper of the cheese and you're the lemon merchant, you get it? And he knows it. That's why he's gonna kill us. So we got to beat it, ya, before he let's loose the marmosets on us. Don't worry little missy, I'll save you!"
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Posted 26 September 2007 - 10:50 PM

I can't find anything wrong. I vote, uh... Cream?! Haha she's underage!
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Posted 27 September 2007 - 05:32 PM

Amy... Rouge... When it comes to "those" things, then it's Rouge... And when it comes to something else... Still Rouge, because... I don't know why!
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Posted 27 September 2007 - 09:28 PM

I think I know why... Perv :lol:
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Posted 28 September 2007 - 09:56 PM

I need more votes.

P.S. Isn't tails a boy.

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Posted 28 September 2007 - 11:16 PM

Darkstalker, on Sep 27 2007, 09:28 PM, said:

I think I know why... Perv :lol:
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Tss, isn't every 14 year-old boy? Well, atleast LOOKING at it... You know what I mean XD
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Posted 29 September 2007 - 03:47 AM

I recommend speech bubbles and turning off capslock. It'll make it easier to read.

By the way, my vote goes for Rouge. Amy is too much of a Sonic fangirl to even notice other guys and with the way this story is set up, it'll lead to a fight between Shadow and Knuckles, which I have always wanted to see.
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Posted 29 September 2007 - 04:15 PM

SONICROXS, on Sep 28 2007, 01:56 PM, said:

P.S. Isn't tails a boy.
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Well, yeah. But Shadow is a queer, so what's it matter?

And, if that doesn't suit your fancy, just have Amy and Rouge end up with each other. That's what the fans REALLY want.
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Posted 29 September 2007 - 04:40 PM

So, hey, I read your comic, and
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Posted 29 September 2007 - 07:14 PM

Oh, and use a better font. Comic Sans MS might work good.
"Pss, hey Guido, its all so clear to me now. I'm the keeper of the cheese and you're the lemon merchant, you get it? And he knows it. That's why he's gonna kill us. So we got to beat it, ya, before he let's loose the marmosets on us. Don't worry little missy, I'll save you!"
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Posted 30 September 2007 - 01:41 AM

I really like your comic keep them coming :D
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Posted 30 September 2007 - 09:22 PM

I like pyroman's idea so i'm going to go with him.

[/QUOTE]shadow's queer.[QUOTE]
No he's not.

I don't have the time to make the comic right now,so it should be up by wensday.
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Post icon  Posted 03 October 2007 - 02:08 AM

okay here it is.Please vote again.

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Posted 03 October 2007 - 06:04 AM

NO! No super form! Shadow's only gonna kick Knuckles' ass!
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